Your opinion on this . ?

No. I really love the third stanza; it adds an element of pathos and tenderness. My favorite stanza is, however, the last. It is so bittersweet and sensitive. I think the repetition of the word "drown" is, in this case, a good thing. It ties the first and last stanzas together and they come full circle in the aspect of drowning in the sheets. Altogether a very nice work. Thank you.